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    dots Submission Name: feardots

    Author: UNunderStood
    ASL Info:    16/f/oh
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 79/87/25
    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 822
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    Bytes: 302

       i wrote this in 5mins i don't really like it but you tell me what you think

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    I can't belaeve you have done this to me,
    Look upon me.
    and see the scars with in my soul,
    you have caused my cuts
    with in my flesh,
    which has made this bloody mess,
    you fear cuz you don't know what to say
    fear for what you have already said

    Submitted on 2005-01-14 12:09:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nice write short and sweet you could of went on but as the writer you no this pieces intent you have enough discription because you leave everyone wandering what they have said to make you so disappointed . self admittance is tough for people to blame them self because they dont no their words or body language speaks volumes great piece
    | Posted on 2005-01-14 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      What has this person done to you to make you feel this way? Why did they hurt you so badly? Those are the qustions that came up while i was reading this. i like the conciseness but a bit more elaboration on your feelings would help to project this piece more. Good job, I like it ^_^
    | Posted on 2005-01-14 00:00:00 | by MedeaPyralis | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it's short and to the point and doesn't drag on. Most people who write poetry and other people read it and could relate to it that really means something.
    | Posted on 2005-01-14 00:00:00 | by D.Johnson p.s.a | [ Reply to This ]
      I felt the rush to finish on this one... I liked it though you did have some spl errors... really good. I thought that even though you rushed it it was pretty good.
    | Posted on 2005-01-14 00:00:00 | by bleedbroken | [ Reply to This ]
      i love this so much. was it like a bad relationship, or something? anyways keep up the great work. i plan to read more posts by you.
    love tina
    | Posted on 2005-01-14 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      nice idea and some nice lines, to me while i was reading it i could just feel that it was written fast, as you said u did.
    | Posted on 2005-01-14 00:00:00 | by bkj43 | [ Reply to This ]

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