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    dots Submission Name: Alternativesdots
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    Author: serpentarius
    ASL Info:    18/m/Melbourne
    Elite Ratio:    3.62 - 97/80/23
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Rant/Comedy
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    Sometimes I try to blow my nose
    And other times I don't
    But when I do it always blows
    Unless of course it won't
    But thats when I can have some fun
    And pick my nose instead
    It feels good to grab ahold of one
    Way up inside your head
    But when the fun is over
    And there's nothing left to grab
    I scratch my arm until it bleeds
    And then play with the scab




    Submitted on 2005-01-14 12:26:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      > way up inside your head

    How about this:

    way up inside my head.

    That way you have agreement throughout, but of course this is just pickin' at boogers... ;-)
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    | Posted on 2005-01-14 00:00:00 | by bent | [ Reply to This ]
      eeeew gross, but fricken halirious!

    One time while grocery shopping I caught my daughter picking her nose after the second time I told her if I catch you again you will keep your finger in there until I say...two minutes later...you guessed it. she spent the whole time we were in the grocery store walking with her finger in her nose that was the last time she ever stuck her finger up there lol

    cruel maybe but c'mon there are too many germs lol :P
    | Posted on 2005-01-14 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      that was brilliant satire. im laughing my ass off. i loved this piece- it was very very funny. i think your nose must be laughing as well. i loved the lead in- something to chew on. HA! indeed it was. it takes a lot of talent to write satire this funny and this uniform, youve a skill for it i would say. im anxious to see more.
    -Q
    | Posted on 2005-01-14 00:00:00 | by TechnoticQ | [ Reply to This ]
      Quite a charming, and yes...graphic way to describe nose-picking, very creative. I don't think anyone has done this as you have! hehe.

    The scab picking at the end could have been left out...ewe! LOL.

    Great job, it made me chuckle.
    | Posted on 2005-05-03 00:00:00 | by SouthrnQT | [ Reply to This ]


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