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    dots Submission Name: Paved with Golddots

    Author: Brwnsknsam05
    ASL Info:    32/F/ Cuba
    Elite Ratio:    4.78 - 399/440/103
    Words: 209
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       This is how I feel some people neglect their lives and fall back into the shadows.

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    dotsPaved with Golddots

    Dedicated to the streets
    Humble to the night
    Caressing a careening darkness
    Sinking into the sunset's shadow

    Falling into the waters
    Empty and shivering
    Devoring you
    Like a majestic recipe
    Swallowing things whole
    And you're running on the brick
    Surrounded by the brink of insanity
    Wallowing on the inside of you

    Testifying that you have stroked
    The appetite of the gothic night
    Foretelling the memory
    Receiving the prophecy
    Like a shadow claw
    Crawling from the womb of flesh
    Into you for strength
    Intertwining with you
    And you walk consistently
    For what lurks in those
    Dream colored shadows
    A black and white portrait
    Holding up your echoe
    Mouth to mouth
    Heart to heart
    Breathing in unison

    The feeling breaks apart
    Leaving you alone
    Without a grasp...for reality
    For anything but...black and white
    A gothic reality
    Hung on the mantle piece
    Of destruction
    Holding your fate
    Like an unborn child
    An echoe of vibrant mischief

    On your street
    In your city
    These streets
    And its weary travelers
    Gothic existance
    Begging for purgatory
    A night's swift slice
    Drenched in a shadow's memory

    Walking these streets...
    Paved with yellow brick
    And a night's kiss
    Gold endearment

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      i always love what you write. wierd huh? It's almost like a drug addict...no? ones always looking...powerless...hungry...begging for purgatory, and whisked away into the darkness that he so craves. thats what i got...i'm probably so off the wall it's not funny, but i liked it.

    it's a shame that people do neglect their lives and get lost in the shadows...isn't it? how they let themselves go for so long, it's almost like they never were. thats a crazy subject... i'm curious micki, what made you write this? i loved it, but what made you think of it? anyway i'm just rambling now... hey take care and write me sometime.

    | Posted on 2005-01-18 00:00:00 | by austin | [ Reply to This ]
      gothic doesn't mean like a goth in this poem I said it so that I could use a different word for darkness...besides black and shadows. Just to clearify that for everyone.
    | Posted on 2005-01-14 00:00:00 | by Brwnsknsam05 | [ Reply to This ]
      Very interesting! I like the way you put everything so elequently! MY fav. lines are:

    For what lurks in those
    Dream colored shadows
    A black and white portrait

    I just keep reading them over and over again trying to get al that I can out of them. Theres so much meaning in these so few words! Awesome job, however everynow and then your flow was chopy but only in like 2 or 3 lines but It was still an awsome poem and that one thing didn't take away form it at all! Good Job
    | Posted on 2005-01-14 00:00:00 | by Devils Angel | [ Reply to This ]

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