Description: This is a simple piece... I guess it's a little blunt. I feel that the poem should have some sort of greater depth with that title, for some reason. It simply has to do with going out and doing something rather than just staying in one place, overall. However, please let me know if you thought it meant something different.
Where the Dandelion Flies -------------------------------------------
Blow me away,
and straight to the wind;
The world will rest on my shoulders.
But can you say,
The Eagle flies
while sleeping overhead?
I'm but so light,
Sticking closely to those like me.
But blow me away,
And I will fly;
Forever I shall be.
This is a simple poem, but the nature of the language you use means that it is open to 'deeper' interpretations by willing readers. You obviously used free verse: no problem there as the piece drifts quite nicely...like a dandelion . The first stanza seemed to try and capture the essence of what it means to be young and curious about the world, and being oblivious to the weight of the world and the dangers therein. From there, there seemed a quantum leap to the next stanza, where I could (since I am looking out for deeper meaning) see a satirical jab at good old Uncle Sam (he never ceases to be maligned here, does he?) with the line about the Eagle sleeping while it is flying...maybe a metaphor for America closing its eyes to the rest of the world and 'flying dangerously'. From there it was back to the initial theme of the first stanza with the 'dandelion' metaphor. There was also a darker theme of mob mentality and the power of collectivism and peer pressure with the line 'sticking closely to those like me'. Finally, the last stanza seemed to conclude that even if the world does blow you away you will manage to survive and enjoy the experience- continuing the optimistic youthful theme of the piece. As I mentioned before, this is a simple piece, but you've written it in a way that can ellicit complex responses from individual readers- the same poem could mean something entirely different to you as a writer or any other reader.
Well talk about simple! It had no meaning but you know the meaning that it had was you know...just a pretty picture, you painted a pretty picture with your words and that was good, because I am sitting in a dark hotel room and envisioning an open field filled of flowers is a good change.
When you are a little pappus of dandelion floating in the clouds, how can the world be on your shoulders? Wouldn't it be under your feet? Why are you suddenly talking about eagles? Develop the dandelion more. There is all sorts of linked imagery you could use here. Dandelion seeds are in clocks, linked naturally with the passage of time and hence mortality which would link in with the last line of your poem and give it some justification.
blow me away can convey shock or surprise too... im wondering whether dandelions can feel that shock or surprise...
anyways though this is quite striaghtforward leaving very little to the imagination i quite like it... i like the contrast between the eagle and the dandelion... both 'soaring' on the wind and yet finding completely different homes or resting places...