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    dots Submission Name: Sunlightdots
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    Author: KrimsonReaper
    ASL Info:    26/M/Denver, CO
    Elite Ratio:    4.61 - 328/443/46
    Words: 395
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 739
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    Bytes: 2446



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       I've only written one song in my life, and this is it. I know that it may seem sappy to some, but it was right for me at the time and it is still right for me now. I am very close to this one, unlike the majority of my work. It is dedicated to the memory of my father, Timothy Marshall Jensen, Sr. (March 2,1958-October 8, 1998)


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    I shook when Mama told me,
    I held her and I cried.
    I couldn’t believe that he was gone;
    I wouldn’t believe he died.
    But on that day his time was up,
    Unto the sky he’s gone,
    To live with Titans beyond the rainbow—
    With his Creator one.


    Daddy, Daddy, won’t you shine for me?
    I’m trying so hard to make you proud of me.
    Daddy, Daddy, my heart feels like stone;
    I know you’ve gone to a better place
    But still I feel alone.


    I saw you praying at my bedside
    When you thought I was sleeping.
    And as I heard you plead for me
    The angels saw me weeping.
    But now you’re gone and it is I
    That kneels for you at midnight.
    I pray for truth and my heart knows
    You’ve gone into the sunlight.


    Daddy, Daddy, won’t you shine for me?
    I’m trying so hard to make you proud of me.
    Daddy, Daddy, my heart feels like stone;
    I know you’ve gone to a better place
    But still I feel alone.


    My daddy is the morning sun,
    I know that he’s with me.
    And every time the dawn does dawn,
    His likeness will I see.
    My daddy is the crescent moon,
    A friend in darkest night,
    ‘Cause when I’m lonely in the gloom,
    I see my daddy’s light.


    Daddy, Daddy, won’t you shine for me?
    I’m trying so hard to make you proud of me.
    Daddy, Daddy, my heart feels like stone;
    I know you’ve gone to a better place
    But still I feel alone.


    His smile is the twilight sunset,
    His laughter shooting stars.
    Oh, Daddy, all I see in sunlight
    Is everything you are.
    My daddy is the lightning crashing,
    A thunderbolt from heaven.
    A thousand galaxies his birthright,
    His soul will live forever.


    Daddy, Daddy, won’t you shine for me?
    I’m trying so hard to make you proud of me.
    Daddy, Daddy, my heart feels like stone;
    I know you’ve gone to a better place
    But still I feel alone.


    So Daddy, Daddy, don’t you cry for me;
    Keep shining on, ‘cause, Daddy, you are free.
    Oh, Daddy, Daddy, I want to be like you,
    I tell the sunlight every day,
    "Oh, Daddy, I love you."





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      Very lamentful, and a tearful song that you wrote...I felt what you were writing, I lost my mother, sister, and brother a couple of months ago, I could feel your pain.
    | Posted on 2004-04-02 00:00:00 | by Crestfallenman | [ Reply to This ]
      i think it's awesome that you had someone in your life that you could feel that way about - and more wonderful that you let yourself feel that way. great write
    | Posted on 2004-03-28 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      i have such terrible fond memories of my father.
    'My daddy is the crescent moon,
    A friend in darkest night,
    ‘Cause when I’m lonely in the gloom,
    I see my daddy’s light.'

    eyes watery. and i didn't even want to read it twice. it's sharpening memory, jamming it into blades and twisting. loss is lost and with it we sometimes go. gone.
    the gone-ness.

    who gets over forever?

    ghost.
    | Posted on 2004-03-25 00:00:00 | by myghostsliketotravel | [ Reply to This ]
      aww this is so sad almost brought a tear to my eyes. I dont think is sappy at all I think its beautiful and it flows very well. Im so sorry about your dad and Im sure that he is up there with god and he is probably very proud of you . Im adding it to one of my favs.
    | Posted on 2004-03-25 00:00:00 | by Exodus Night Sky | [ Reply to This ]
      Aw, this is so sad and sweet. I feel for you *huge hug*! This is great.
    | Posted on 2004-03-25 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww... that is not sappy, it is really sad, I am sorry your dad left you, but I am glad that you got to put your feeling down on paper, thats a true writer! GReat JOb!
    | Posted on 2004-03-25 00:00:00 | by ViCiOuSWrItEr | [ Reply to This ]
      And every time the dawn does dawn,
    This line would read just as well like this,
    "And everytime the dawn does break,...otherwise, it's a moving song. the ending is slightly abrubt, might be calling for a few extra words or explanation.
    | Posted on 2004-03-26 00:00:00 | by adias27 | [ Reply to This ]


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