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    dots Submission Name: Empty Souldots
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    Author: RedRoseofBlood
    ASL Info:    19/f/outsideyourwindow
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 592/582/135
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsEmpty Souldots
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    Empty soul
    No control
    Over my thoughts
    Arcane dreams
    Shrill, startling screams
    Delicate dancing fairies
    Transparent wings flutter among the berries
    Blue, red, and pink
    I can't seem to think
    HELP ME!
    Arcane dreams
    Shrill, startling screams
    Out of control
    Empty soul
    Filled with meaningless things




    Submitted on 2005-01-14 21:35:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I loved the imagery on this piece, a real work of art! This is definitely my favorite pipe-dream! Thanks for writing!
    ~~TIm
    | Posted on 2005-01-14 00:00:00 | by sbd21 | [ Reply to This ]


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