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    dots Submission Name: Welcome to Depressiondots
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    Author: Ola
    ASL Info:    18/f/USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 221/187/42
    Words: 347
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 286
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2220



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       I was going thru hard times soem time back...I worte this then...tell me what u think.


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    dotsWelcome to Depressiondots
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    Welcome to depression, depression 101
    where it's nearing sadness and you're losing all the fun
    Welcome to depression, depression 101
    Where what you must do is accept, don’t run
    Welcome to depression

    For some of you, this might be your first class
    and hi again to those who have been here in the past
    Let me let this out, this ain't the easiest class
    It's very basic what you have to do to pass

    Find your pain, embrace it
    don’t give a damn about saving face.
    Don’t think about nothing else
    maybe, maybe
    Cos then you'll end up
    failing, failing

    Welcome to depression, depression 102
    Looks like we have new faces yea how are you
    This is way different you're in a whole new level
    When you tried and failed, you play and loose
    Welcome, Welcome...I welcome you.

    In this new level, there will be no more tears
    even though you're heart is breaking, u should have no fear
    Believe me I’ve already been there, know all the ins and outs
    How to make my way about.

    The way to pass this class
    Is not to lose yourself and start messing around
    You need to get a hold of yourself
    Just make sure your feet is on the ground

    Welcome to class 103
    Sad thing you are here like me
    My friends and family warned me
    They said don’t get in too deep
    But I didn’t listen
    Welcome to depression 103

    This is the last living stage
    Done let things fester up in rage
    Get rid of it while you still can
    While your feet is still non the hard ground

    You’ll take your final breath here
    There ain’t no going back now
    And all the crying, the pleading
    Don’t mean a freaking thing now

    Welcome, Welcome, Welcome
    Welcome to Class 104
    You are lying…dead on the floor
    And the sorrow and pain is being drained with your blood
    Welcome to Class 104
    When the soul begs form the poor
    Welcome, Welcome to depression.





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      even though i love depress dark words, this didnt seem all that great to me. it was simple. didnt really show creativity or originality. did get what the "101 or 102" was for. the idea was very clever. and i couldnt make out a tune to it. it didnt even seem depressed to me. didnt have that depressing feeling. liked the idea of this. but the way you wrote it wasnt good. it didnt interest me that much.

    You are lying…dead on the floor
    And the sorrow and pain is being drained with your blood

    i like this but you could maybe change the words "sorrow and pain".

    just my view on this.

    -soomie
    | Posted on 2005-05-01 00:00:00 | by poeticblindness | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey there! Nice to see you still up and about, haven't from you in a while. I like the imagery of the classes and how the depression continues but I also think that this isn't really suited for lyrics as such, despite its repetition because the subject may be hard to communicate when there is a lot to be absorbed from this. But hey, thats just the word of a song writer! Nice work!
    | Posted on 2005-01-15 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      i really liked this poem. You wrote about a really common subject, depression, but wrote about it as 4 stages or "classes" and made sense...it was different
    good job!
    ~Rhen
    | Posted on 2005-01-14 00:00:00 | by rhen | [ Reply to This ]
      i loved this piece. the theme was quite nice and the style was most unique. i love the counting and increase in degree of pledge. although it was long, i had no trouble getting through it because it flowed so nicely. well done here, great write i think.
    -Q
    | Posted on 2005-01-14 00:00:00 | by TechnoticQ | [ Reply to This ]



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