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    dots Submission Name: fudge cakes and barnicle bunsdots

    Author: Semper Fidelis
    ASL Info:    22/Male/ouahu, Hawaii
    Elite Ratio:    3.37 - 135/185/60
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Longing
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       don't mind the title, I didn't know what to name it. Later poets.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsfudge cakes and barnicle bunsdots

    Every second is a countdown
    every day is one less you have to live

    I am leaving soon
    I began this journey when no one wanted me here
    and now I have someone.
    What am I to do?

    The clock is ticking too quickly,
    like a bomb that you just cant diffuse
    Urgency. To live now what I couldn't before

    Love envelopes me and before I was overwhelmed,
    I sold myself to the hate of this war.

    She is the only thing that keeps me from
    dropping this reality and creating my own.
    From releasing the beast inside
    that rattles his chains and shakes at the restraints I've bestowed.

    One less poem to write
    one less inner conflict to fight
    One less long night before
    I leave and be gone.

    Submitted on 2005-01-14 23:03:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this kind of reminds me of robert frost. very insightful and quite well written, it is almost transcendental. i loved the envelopes reference- i think it really pushes your point across in a most unique way. great write here.
    i liked it quite a bit.
    | Posted on 2005-01-15 00:00:00 | by TechnoticQ | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes, you do need to change the title,lol

    here's my suggestion, counting down with love.

    I really like the angst and the hope of wanting to stay alive knowing that you have someone who so get and love you the way you need to be.

    Very good write

    keep writing and I will keep reading
    | Posted on 2005-01-15 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      EAS and then become a dependant.
    Nah just kidding, that sucks, but thats the Corps, everyone you meet leaves eventually, because either you psc or they eas or even now, eveyone is getting deployed. I hope you find your way,
    | Posted on 2005-01-14 00:00:00 | by theDevilsPocket | [ Reply to This ]

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