This is beautiful, poignant and sad. I love it. It brings home a feeling of utter devastation and grief - so fully enveloping you in its' steel band that you cannot move your lips to halt his step away from you. I picture a tear slowly forming and helplessly rolling down a frozen cheek, the only form of movement pushed from a very still heart. Leaves me breathless!
I liked this. I interpreted this as wanting to say sumtin and let someone know how u feel but then u stay frozen because ur afraid of what they might think so the longer u keep it to urself the farrther away the person goes and the harder it gets to get out ur feelings for that person...anywayz i really enjoyed it! ~rhen
Oh My God! I loved this! It really hit home with me. I don't know how many times i've watched my boyfriend leave down the dimly lighted road, and just stood there frozen bawling my eyes out. We live far apart so he leaves a lot. This was short and to the point, and that's why i liked it so much. It was great! Good job!
Frozen is the word. I believe everybody can relate to the feeling of watching somebody you care about walk away, both literally and metaphorically. It is certainly apalling to just stay as people you know leave. To witness their deaths, to witness how their hearts rot inside their chest, it is terrible, horrible. Congratulations for building such a real description, this is beautiful.
i think we've all suffered from this dilemma, wanting to say something but feeling totally frozen and unable to do so. all we can do is cry, feel that sting of the tears. what we wanted to say comes later when it's a bit too late.
the stinging made me think of when you touch that icy stuff on the inside of the freezer and it stings...