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    dots Submission Name: Another Pill (Revised)dots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 864
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    Bytes: 487



    Description:
       I agreed with all the comments I had on this one, I took out most of the rhyme and it seems to be more serious now. Thanks to everyone who commented on the forst one.


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    dotsAnother Pill (Revised)dots
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    Another pill, do I think this is cool?
    against my will
    I am another typical stranger
    but once it's put before me, this pink piece of take me away
    I have little self control and so much pain
    another pill
    its really not as it seems
    I never take to much
    but I find myself in this place again
    it's not an addiction
    just something I always give in to
    maybe I take these pills
    to get closer to you




    Submitted on 2005-01-15 12:30:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I want to like this poem but i just don't get it. If it's not an addiction, then why is it something you always give in to? And what is met ny another typical stranger? Still I feel like there is something beneath the surface, I just can't see what it is. Maybe I'll have a (several) drink (drinks) first and read it again. I still like the majority of your stuff though.
    | Posted on 2005-01-30 00:00:00 | by spoken | [ Reply to This ]
      who are you getting closer to? It kinda sends mixed feelings on addiction and pain. I do think you have deep feelings in this poem, but I think theres more that could come out. Good write
    | Posted on 2005-01-15 00:00:00 | by lindadoster | [ Reply to This ]


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