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    dots Submission Name: Into hate~dots
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    Author: Laveina
    ASL Info:    18/f/Neverland
    Elite Ratio:    2.62 - 151/134/37
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Venting
    Total Views: 399
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 907



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       My Dad told me I might aswell kill myself and I have made an oath never to kill myself and it was hard not to today... So I wrote this.


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    dotsInto hate~dots
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    What can we do
    we hate all of you
    you tell us to go and end our lives

    I am falling, deeper into hate,
    I want you to just kill me, you are making
    my life miserable, like a living hell.

    What can we do, other than look at you
    we don't want to end out lives, but the days
    they bite and these wounds they are bleeding

    And we are falling deeper into hate
    We wish for life to end
    you are making our lives miserable and we wanna get away

    we can't get out cause we're to young
    but don't they see we're already dying!
    Dying....

    Someone help us out, of this deepend hole
    this deep and dark place we've grown to love
    because comfort is hard to find and we keep our
    thoughts inside because we wish you would care..




    Submitted on 2005-01-15 13:51:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Okay, my rule of thumb is that any writing that can cause me to tear up is pretty good probably... any writing that can cause those tears to fall is pretty awesome probably... any writing, like this one, that can cause me to cry openly is amazing. Thank you for this.

    I can relate on two different levels. I spent my entire upbringing knowing that my father didn't really care, and wanting to die... but clinging to life so as not to give him the satisfaction of having driven me to it.

    The second? My kids. I can only imagine the hell that they are going through, and this sounds like it.

    The last stanza really brings it home for me. The whole of this write sounds so angry, but when you hit the end, you get a feel for the yearning and the desire for love, the sadness and depression that is really beneath the expression of anger.
    | Posted on 2005-01-22 00:00:00 | by jer | [ Reply to This ]



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