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With blond hair and blue eyes, you'd expect nothing short of perfection. You'd be wrong. Because she writes of the tears she's shed, but you'll never see her cry. I can see it. There's something in her eyes that says she never says all that's racing through her mind. There's a wall she likes to keep up, but those damn eyes give her away and I can see my reflection every time she looks at me. |
Well i definitely think this is a good poem, and it gives an apt description of this girl i'm sure. The only thing i see wrong is that u say eyes a lot...maybe if u could convey the same idea with different wording? hehe i dunno im picky but i do like this...its always great to paint a picture with words, especially for a certain person. Good Job. Laura | Posted on 2005-01-15 00:00:00 | by etheariac | [ Reply to This ] | well maybe i like it because i know who you are talking about. You should write more about her though...like her mannerisms so she seems more real to people like she is to us. | -D | Posted on 2005-02-22 00:00:00 | by Astarael | [ Reply to This ] | |