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Floating Polkadots

Author: Kalidoscopeeyes
ASL Info:    18/f
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Words: 76
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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about a girl i know. uhm. i don't really know about this one...didn't really think about it, it just came out...

Floating Polkadots

With blond hair and blue eyes,
you'd expect nothing short of perfection.
You'd be wrong.
Because she writes of the tears she's shed,
but you'll never see her cry.
I can see it.
There's something in her eyes
that says she never says all that's
racing through her mind.
There's a wall she likes to keep up,
but those damn eyes give her away
and I can see my reflection
every time she looks at me.

Submitted on 2005-01-15 22:56:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Well i definitely think this is a good poem, and it gives an apt description of this girl i'm sure. The only thing i see wrong is that u say eyes a lot...maybe if u could convey the same idea with different wording? hehe i dunno im picky but i do like this...its always great to paint a picture with words, especially for a certain person. Good Job.
| Posted on 2005-01-15 00:00:00 | by etheariac | [ Reply to This ]
  well maybe i like it because i know who you are talking about. You should write more about her her mannerisms so she seems more real to people like she is to us.
| Posted on 2005-02-22 00:00:00 | by Astarael | [ Reply to This ]

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