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    dots Submission Name: Floating Polkadotsdots
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    Author: Kalidoscopeeyes
    ASL Info:    18/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.64 - 122/151/29
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 266
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 513



    Description:
       about a girl i know. uhm. i don't really know about this one...didn't really think about it, it just came out...


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    With blond hair and blue eyes,
    you'd expect nothing short of perfection.
    You'd be wrong.
    Because she writes of the tears she's shed,
    but you'll never see her cry.
    I can see it.
    There's something in her eyes
    that says she never says all that's
    racing through her mind.
    There's a wall she likes to keep up,
    but those damn eyes give her away
    and I can see my reflection
    every time she looks at me.




    Submitted on 2005-01-15 22:56:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well i definitely think this is a good poem, and it gives an apt description of this girl i'm sure. The only thing i see wrong is that u say eyes a lot...maybe if u could convey the same idea with different wording? hehe i dunno im picky but i do like this...its always great to paint a picture with words, especially for a certain person. Good Job.
    Laura
    | Posted on 2005-01-15 00:00:00 | by etheariac | [ Reply to This ]
      well maybe i like it because i know who you are talking about. You should write more about her though...like her mannerisms so she seems more real to people like she is to us.
    -D
    | Posted on 2005-02-22 00:00:00 | by Astarael | [ Reply to This ]



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