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    dots Submission Name: You Didn't Have Todots
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    Author: wildcatchamps
    ASL Info:    33 Las Vegas
    Elite Ratio:    5.42 - 47/57/34
    Words: 251
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 642
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1398



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    dotsYou Didn't Have Todots
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    I only wanted what was best for you
    I only wanted to be there
    With the love you need
    I was the one who always, loved you true
    So why do you have to lie
    Why did I have to cry
    Why did u say those things
    If you did not mean anything
    Why did you have to go and
    Turn my world so cold
    And take away that heaven
    That I use to hold

    You didn't have to hurt me
    you didn't have to make me, make me cry
    you didn't have to break my
    Heart in a thousand pieces
    Why I was the one who always, stood by you
    I was the one who always, gave so unselfishly
    There was not one thing that
    I would not do
    How can you be so cruel
    How could I be a fool
    How could you take my trust
    And turn that trust right into dust
    How could you say you cared
    Then leave me standing there
    So cold and all alone
    You know its just not fair
    Why did you treat me so bad
    When i gave you all I had in my heart
    Oh why did you take my love
    And throw my love away
    Gave my world
    Gave my soul
    Gave you everything

    You didn't have to hurt me
    You didn't have to make cry
    You didn't have to break my
    Heart in a thousand pieces




    Submitted on 2005-01-16 04:38:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well, halfway through I started hating it, but, then I added my own song-sounds in the back, and read it with that Rhythm, and I was amazed. It sounded so great I was like "Man, I want to hear this song!" I have no critiques for it, as I did enjoy it.
    | Posted on 2005-01-16 00:00:00 | by wordslinger | [ Reply to This ]


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