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    dots Submission Name: Not Readydots
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    Author: wildcatchamps
    ASL Info:    33 Las Vegas
    Elite Ratio:    5.42 - 47/57/34
    Words: 281
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 595
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    Bytes: 1610



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    dotsNot Readydots
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    Sitting here staring at the wall
    Another lonely tear falls
    Iím trying to write you this song
    But I can hardly see the page at all
    Cause itís breaking my heart
    When I look in your eyes
    And I donít see me anymore
    Oh, and youíre all Iím living for
    Baby, tell me that you still believe

    That you still love me
    The way I love you
    If you take your love away from me
    You know I would die
    Cause Iím not ready for goodbye
    Baby, please pick up the phone
    Tell me Iím crazy, I got it all wrong
    I donít know what Iím gonna do
    I donít know how to live without you

    You are the first song
    My heart ever heard
    And baby, I believed every word
    You are my heart, my soul, my world
    Baby, tell me that you still believe
    That you still love me
    The way I love you
    If you take your love away from me
    You know I would die
    Cause Iím not ready for goodbye
    Every breath that I take, every beat of my heart
    You know itís all for you
    I wanna hold you, I wanna love you

    Forever and always
    Baby, tell me that you still believe
    That you still love me
    The way I love you
    If you take your love away from me
    You know I would die
    ĎCause Iím not ready for
    Baby, tell me that you still believe
    That you still love me
    The way I love you
    If you take your love away from me
    I know I would die
    Cause Iím not ready for goodbye




    Submitted on 2005-01-16 05:00:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This seems just like the last one, but I added the same beat and I liked it.

    Tell me Iím crazy, I got it all wrong
    I donít know what Iím gonna do
    I donít know how to live without you

    Cut out the second I don't know how to keep the rhythm. There are other parts in this that do the same, find them, fix them, because there are alot. Overall I liked how it went, especially with the background music in my head I added. Good job.
    | Posted on 2005-01-16 00:00:00 | by wordslinger | [ Reply to This ]


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