Description: this is baisicly two side poem i wrote when i caused the one i love to question her love for someone else i apolgize for how short it is but i hope you enjoy it
I felt the thought behind it, but I felt the poem went on the surface, like it wasn't the felt emotion. it was just actions and easy written. But I loved the thought of how i could've ended PS: You wrote you are; your, but it's you're instead. You also wrote know instead of now. In the sentence "...Wings a scream..." I believe you meant to write "...wings AND scream..."? Anyway, I'm sorry if I seem negative I only want to help... good luck further on...
that was very beautiful, very short like you said but that's ok, i think you got hte feelings across pretty well. if you add more you could probably make it better but if you don't wish to it's fine just the way it is.
Submission Name: pining away
PS: You wrote you are; your, but it's you're instead. You also wrote know instead of now.
good luck further on... 