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Like You Have


Author: Suven7
ASL Info:    20 female Fla
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Class/Type: Poetry /Nostalgia
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This morning, I rediscovered that I had a livejournal online. It looked empty and lame, then...I stumbled upon a single post. It was written on and for my Dad's birthday last year. Whether I gave it to him or not...I don't recall, nonetheless I wish I could share it with him now...


Like You Have



Thank you for the years of guidance
Though few years, I will follow life
And learn to conquer my fears
Like you have

Thank you for the nights of patience
Helping me learn, shaping my views
To constantly yearn, for knowledge
Like you have

Thank you for the camping trips
When I sit close to the fire
Thinking of the dad who built it
Comforts me; warms my hands

Thank you for being there
For my basketball games,
Assemblies, recognitions
Losing working hours to see
My interests through

You and your video camera
My true fans

It’s so wonderful
To be able to thank you
And to have already received
Your warm welcome
It is through everything you’ve
Taught me
And everything you’ve displayed
And the times you’ve shown me
That for the better you’ve prayed.




Submitted on 2005-01-17 12:59:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  As usual, wonderful. I don't know who this is about, but whoever it is, they sound very special. I like these lines
"It’s so wonderful
To be able to thank you
And to have already received
Your welcome "
especially. It's kind of fun to get lost in those words.
| Posted on 2005-01-18 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]
  i really liked this (though i get the idea your dad isnt here anymore from your description of this write...?)
i really loved this coz... Dads are the most amazing ppl ever... especially in a daughters world... of that i am convinced. my dad has done some very hurtful things over the years and yet it is not those things that i remember... i worship him even now (perhaps even more so now) and i remember all the fun times we have had and all the things he has taught me and i hear the same thing coming through in this write of yours...

You and your video camera
My true fans

i LOVE this line! when i read i was just like YES! memories forever captured... the fun times... the times you acted the fool for the sake of your fans...

all i can say is that this really blessed me.
thank you for sharing this
take care of you
| Posted on 2005-01-17 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey babe! I have to agree...with the other commentors. However, I dont think they know the story. haha. Believe in me babe. i know how you feel. my family is the same way. I too could write about my dad. He is a great person! to the rest of my family he is not. I too share the same feelings you do towards your stepdad. Although, you are blessed...my dad is not there for my recognitions and assemblies, but rather at work. However i am still very proud of him. For all that he has accomplished. I just wish someday he would see the light, and even be saved. Ill always be there for you babe. dont ever forget that! Love-Olah89
| Posted on 2005-01-17 00:00:00 | by Olah89 | [ Reply to This ]
  "And to have already received
Your welcome "
you're welcome...

That was nice of you to write a poem for your father...I was going to write a powm for my parents anniversary, but I never got to... :(
This poem is really nice, and light. I'm used to reading like dark poetry, or angsty stuff, but this is so light and nice. It is like happy and sad at the same time, because you are reminissing about him, so that makes you happy, but then it is sad because of the reminissing makes it seem like he is gone or something, and you missed your chance to thank him...
| Posted on 2005-01-17 00:00:00 | by unclear-fantasy | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey, wow....nice job....I know the feeling. I too have a wonderful father and feel the dedication and love that he gives so willingly reguardless of what he's got going on at the time- jobs, yardwork, etc. It doesn't matter, he always gives up his time to my brother and I. I want to walk in his footsteps and maybe one day be as dedicated to my children as he is to us. Thanks for sharing this...you're really talented. Hope to read more.
-----wandering
| Posted on 2005-01-17 00:00:00 | by wanderingpoet16 | [ Reply to This ]


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