Description: I wrote this for my baby while he was away... I love you Ben.
For Ben -------------------------------------------
Love
a tired face looks up at me
and dies a little
as each kiss
forces on a million more
and I have you cupped firmly
in the palm of my hand
like the bud of a baby rose
that cried dew onto my skin
while lying asleep in the meadow.
I strip you naked
peeling each petal from your stem
kissing each velvet treat
to the floor
and using you
begging for more
I love you
hold me once more.
You look down at me
with that tired face
as I dress you back up
each vien perfectly laced.
Violets and Orchids rest lazily
in the sun
filled around me
but only a rose could smell so sweet.
I love you
only you.
WOW I really like this poem it tells a lot... I hope all works out with you and your boyfriend... My boyfriend lives like 3000 miles away from me but I am moving in with him soon... I really do like your poems though it has a lot of meaning to it ~*Becca*~
this ben dude must be one hella lucky guy! lol. i like this write. especially the comparisions you make with flowers. (especially the part where you say
"Violets and Orchids rest lazily in the sun filled around me but only a rose could smell so sweet.")
it also seems kinda apologetic, cause you say:
"and using you begging for more"
kinda suggesting that you think it's draining everything from you, but you still need his love. loved the rose part too.
on the whole a real nice write. ben must be pretty lucky to have you.
This is a lovely poem to your man. Very sexy and romantic. I love how you speak of him as if he was a rose. Something about that is just really good, maybe because he is a man and we dont tend to think of men as flowers, but I really like how you did in this poem. I can tell you have strong feelings for this guy and I hope he is back in your life now? It sucks when you love someone and they are away and you cant see them for a while. It can drive you crazy but then when they return...oooooh la la! haha! Very nice poem you have here. Take care.
Beautiful This is a heartfelt poem where you laid it all on the table I can tell Ben is a big part of you and always will be He is lucky to have you in his life Take Care Ron
And thank you for your recent comments My litttle sister will always be a part of me and I thank my Lord every day for her Ron
A tender show of emotion... using the images of flowers and petals is very unique and touches the reader more deeply. Sublime tenderness and love... My fav lines are:
"and I have you cupped firmly in the palm of my hand like the bud of a baby rose that cried dew onto my skin".
Submission Name: For Ben
