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    dots Submission Name: Brokendots
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    Author: Kitty
    ASL Info:    14/F/Vermont
    Elite Ratio:    2.51 - 23/29/12
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 940
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 907



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       Just give me feedback. Anything is fine. Did this happen to you? Do you feel the same? I hope you understand what this poem is saying.


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    dotsBrokendots
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    Broken
    That is all she is
    He took her trust
    The first time he touched her
    Broken
    Is that all she can be?
    She can't tell
    No one will believe her
    It was her fault
    She asked for it
    But she was only an innocent little girl
    Broken
    But wasn't she naive?
    She was numb
    She forgot
    But it's back now
    Haunting
    It hurts
    It's changed her
    Broken
    But did it happen?
    Was a bad dream? A nightmare?
    She forgot for years
    But it came back with a vengaence
    It won't leave her alone
    Broken
    That's what she is behind her smile
    Her weak laughter
    Her sad eyes
    On the inside
    Broken
    She knows it was wrong
    A mistake
    But it happened
    And it only left her
    Broken




    Submitted on 2005-01-17 13:34:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Thanks for finding the errors I miss. Your being clear. It's a poem with complicated emotion...The mistake is how I wanted it. Thank you!
    | Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by Kitty | [ Reply to This ]


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