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    dots Submission Name: Alonedots

    Author: Kitty
    ASL Info:    14/F/Vermont
    Elite Ratio:    2.51 - 23/29/12
    Words: 242
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
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    She's all alone
    With darkness on all sides
    Pressing up agaisnt her
    But there is no one there to light up her life

    It's cold
    She shivers
    But there is no one there to warm her

    She screams
    And it echos around her
    A chorus of a thousand voices
    But there is no one there to hear her

    Warm tears run down her face
    She sobs
    She aches
    But there no one there to comfort her

    She is a puzzle
    Made of thousands of pieces
    Each person in her life making part of her
    But there no one there to complete her

    Never has she found another just like her
    To share her pain and sorrow

    She has only herself
    And is losing that too
    She has lost the battle
    And the war

    The pain overcomes
    Leaving her nothing
    No hope
    No light

    It has taken her faith
    Her will
    Her strength
    And it's taking her mind too

    Her mind is gone
    It's all over
    She is dead

    Her soul is gone
    She has no heart
    Only numbness
    She is only a hollow shell

    With no one else
    It has taken her too
    The lonliness
    It ate away at her

    That's her
    Empty space
    Vast as the sky

    She can no longer feel
    But she can
    It's cunfusing
    But that's her


    Submitted on 2005-01-17 14:23:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Thanks! This and Broken are, sadly, my best poems. Thanks for the compliments! It won't let me post this comment so i have to say line six looks funny. Lets see if i can post this now.
    | Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by Kitty | [ Reply to This ]

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