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A Beacon For The Demented


Author: painofthanatos
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angry rant at being lied to about my friends smoking...


A Beacon For The Demented



A beacon for the demented
I keep up my lies
To keep them alive
I don't love them
I don't care
I have enought to worry about
Without pretending to be upset
That you're smoking
I can't be disappointed by you anymore
I just don't care

You've been killing yourself since the day I met you
Cigarettes, pot, booze, and knives
Your 'Only Friends,' right?
So why do you keep telling me you need me?
You're killing yourself
Inside and out
And my feeble attempts mean fucking nothing to you

So why should I bother?
Tell me, Erica, why should I care?
Why should I love someone
Whose going to ignore
The heart they've shatered?

Now I know why those best friends neckleaces
Always come in the shape of a
Broken
Heart




Submitted on 2005-01-17 19:48:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Now I know why those best friends neckleaces
Always come in the shape of a
Broken
Heart

Those lines...as a final crescendo...were just simply wow. I know nothing else I can say. It just was ... the perfect ending to a clearly, emotional, venting letter to a friend that keeps hurting you. Good luck with her, Keep writing.
~BCute
| Posted on 2005-01-17 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]


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