Description: I read something recently that reminded me of a couple friends I knew in elementary all the way to middle school since I went to a Catholic private school (K-8th grade). I don't talk to them much now, and the weather and these pensive thoughts kind of drove me to write this poem. I know it's not the greatest, so feedback is greatly appreciated.
Memoir of Reflections -------------------------------------------
California heat and buildings laced
in streaks of sunlight, combing across
the suburb ranks,
bring back precious thoughts of a childhood
(but thatís all forgotten now).
A simple picture book reminds me
of the campfire, don with lake
and dandy fireflies;
set alight upon tree branches
collected during the day--
(how long has it been since then?)
Another picture invokes me:
Checkered skirts and polo shirts
assigned as uniform in the private schools;
People that used to smile at me
are now among new friends
(where are they now?)
Mickey Mouse and Donald Duck
smile beside some kids clad
in free dress; a phenomenon not
common in the school I used to go to.
The castle stands tall, as always,
behind our backs
(though I had not paid much attention before).
Iíve forgotten the little things
that have painted my world today,
awoken by a simple photo book
brought on by boredom and the California heat.
WOW. what Some awesome memories you have there. You did a wonderful job with this and I love how you explained how intense the heat was with "California Heat" I know how it is, cause I live in california too!
Its a really cute poem and it flowes so well, the thoughts you have in your mind that come out and go as a side thought almost and how simple you made it was perfect for reminisance (<-sp) And the simple times that you probably miss the most, i know i miss all the free time i used to have, i guess i took it for granted... oh well.
This poem is so wonderful and wonderfully written.
i really like this line. "smile beside some kids clad in free dress.A phenomenon not common in the school I used to go to."
but maybe you shouldn't end the thought but keep on going, "in free dress, a phenomenon not..." cause to me it seems to disrupt the thought.