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    dots Submission Name: I Need An Angeldots
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    Author: wildcatchamps
    ASL Info:    33 Las Vegas
    Elite Ratio:    5.42 - 47/57/34
    Words: 311
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 704
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Sooner or later, when the time is right, you know that Iíll be waiting here
    And Iím sure that you will find your way to me
    Baby Iíll be ready, Iíve had so many lonely nights
    I want a love that feels so right, and you know Iíll be waiting for you
    And baby if I could let you know
    Itís more than a feeling, itís what I believe in, and I canít let this go

    I need an angel in my life, little angelhere tonight
    I need an angel here by my side
    It must be like heaven when you find someone, someone whoís really wanting you
    And I know there must be one love there for me
    I spent a lifetime waiting, and now I feel the time is right
    For you to come into my life, you know Iíll be ready for you
    And baby my love could be so strong
    So donít keep me waiting, my heartís nearly breaking

    Iíve been on my own too long
    I need an angel in my life, little angelhere tonight
    I need an angel by my side
    Iím waitin for an angel here tonight
    Little angel shine your light, I need an angel by my side
    Cause I want a perfect lover, and I wonít need another
    Just wanna show ya, show you what my loving can do

    Baby if I could let you know
    Itís more than a feeling, itís what I believe in, and I canít let this go
    I need an angel in my life, little angel here tonight
    I need an angel by my side
    Iím waiting for you in my life, little angel shine your light

    Baby, I need an angel by my side
    I need an angel in my life for you, shine your light
    I need an angel here tonight




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      this one was really songlike(well, duh, it says lyrics), and strongly told about love, or more like longing for it.

    "Baby, I need an angel by my side
    I need an angel in my life for you, shine your light
    I need an angel here tonight"

    this was really a nice line, i like the rhyming aswell. the only downside with the whole poem was that it's kind of used. hopefully i don't sound too harsh, but there are millions of lovesongs out there, every second of them repeating the same longing-theme. this wasn't really original in my opinion.
    but if we forget that, and think this one as an independent whole, then i can only say it's a really beautiful piece of art.

    "So donít keep me waiting, my heartís nearly breaking" this one was my fav line. really tells the point.
    | Posted on 2005-01-24 00:00:00 | by _taateli_ | [ Reply to This ]


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