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    dots Submission Name: Just a Crushdots
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    Author: River
    ASL Info:    17/F/New York
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 26/37/14
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 275
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    dotsJust a Crushdots
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    The pain that shoots through my heart knowing that I could never touch your lips with mine.
    Is more unbearable than the flesh that I bear, that you hate so much.
    Just a glimpse of your eyes, the reflection of me in the mist of never fallen tears.
    Two souls entwined to create one beautiful spirit.
    The tension, the heat, I feel when we brush cheeks. Yes, so weak.
    And all that runs through my mind I dare not speak.
    For fear that I will tell you my name.
    For fear you will not accept me.
    For fear that I might me tempted to cry upon your answer, like a weeping willow on a rainy day,
    Just drooping down alone.




    Submitted on 2005-01-18 06:58:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      crushes suck butt! lol. this is a nice poem. It really describes how it feels...to know it will never happen. this is a wonderful poem. You did a nice job!
    | Posted on 2005-01-22 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]
      wow great piece.lots emmiotion and teh flow was great.this really came from the heart. Don't change a thing. hope to here from you.
    | Posted on 2005-01-18 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]
      wOw ! really good write !
    from yearning to lover's apprehensions your poems has it all.
    And great use to imagery !
    Keep writing
    | Posted on 2005-01-18 00:00:00 | by moaxcym | [ Reply to This ]
      awww thats really good, a lot of imagery, i can so totally relate! lol i feel the exact same way right now, i thought it was really good! all the emotion is just SOOO strong! deff keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2005-01-18 00:00:00 | by DancingGirl | [ Reply to This ]



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