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    dots Submission Name: Haiku (first attempt)dots
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    Author: BenCollier
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 425/386/88
    Words: 19
    Class/Type: Haiku/Serious
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       I have neved tried a Haiku before. I would appreciate input. Is the meaning clear? The choice of words good?


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    dotsHaiku (first attempt)dots
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    Division of acquisitions both material and emotional
    Cleaved security garnered as one
    Elation birthed of release,
    Divorce




    Submitted on 2005-01-18 09:01:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I clearly love this and you have been told about the rules. I think it is wonderful to simply write a good short poem. You commented on my Poem Desperate Housewives that I might add another stanza. I tend to be brief. I do write haiku and you may like to look at them. Well they are not really haiku but senryu whick follows the same rules, but is usually about emotion rather than nature. Lynn
    | Posted on 2005-01-18 00:00:00 | by greensnake | [ Reply to This ]
      You didn't follow the rules,bad boy,lol I like the attempt though, now that you know the rules, I think you will do a great job of writing one. I wish you good luck, my friend.
    | Posted on 2005-02-21 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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