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SENORITA


Author: realpassion
ASL Info:    27/Male/Nigeria
Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 81 /70 /50
Words: 103
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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SENORITA



How dot' your dainty looks
Cast its' grip infectious
On my steel heart?
Like a bandit, this cold january
Walks slyly to freeze
My warm breathe;
And my moonmaid bar indoors...
Now 'am left with warm thoughts
As my only handy weapon,
Whose weight surpasses a whales'.
And my flintstone-like heart
Could erupt.
Just one deep kiss from you
Which intensely will my sleeping
Veins dilate;
And with a glowing fuel of passion
Rekindle our dying flames...




Submitted on 2005-01-18 12:32:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like the flow. very well done. so much feeling. I love the descriptions. I can close my eyes and literally see thie feeling in this poem
| Posted on 2005-01-18 00:00:00 | by ladyravnos316 | [ Reply to This ]
  Very good, very good. I really liked the descriptions you used in this piece. I liked the intensity you put into it also. Very good work.
| Posted on 2005-01-18 00:00:00 | by BloodyWords | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked this.. at first I was really lost cause it didn't seem to flow from line to line... and I don't mean flow as in rhyme I mean as in make sense but then i read it again and it made perfect sense to me.. this was good. I like your style of writting... I can't wait to read more of your stuff it seems really cool. the subject for this was really appropriate because after reading it twice I saw the passion for another person. your words were well choosen and it made the poem awesome. cool.
| Posted on 2005-01-18 00:00:00 | by bleedbroken | [ Reply to This ]


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