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    dots Submission Name: Flawless Rosedots
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    Author: Star_searcher
    ASL Info:    17/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 114/109/20
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsFlawless Rosedots
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    You left me dying on the ground,
    choking on the flower.
    Twas the flower you gave me,
    telling me you loved me.
    "The Flawless Rose"
    that reminded you of me so.

    But the flower wilted,
    died along with our love.
    And i was no longer perfect,
    my petals fell off.
    But she was your perfect,
    She was your flawless rose.




    Submitted on 2005-01-18 16:08:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That sucks! The time and events you write about here. Yeah, roses...very delicate flowers that must be cared for lest they whither and die. I liked your comparisons to them and a person. Very imaginative and creative. Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Being traded sucks...I could really feel your pain coming through the words. Sometimes short poems speak volumes, because there's no beating around the bush. Eventhough you used metaphor, it was clear what you were talking about. Keep it up!
    | Posted on 2005-03-17 00:00:00 | by Dipsomniac | [ Reply to This ]
      the whole thing it made me visualize like those old black and white romance movies where you always see a rose lying in a puddle while it's raining. that may have not been what you were going for but you did a good job showing it.
    -reminds me of throwing away dead roses in favor of the new brighter ones. god bless the people who hang them upside down so they keep forever.
    -wildchild
    | Posted on 2005-01-18 00:00:00 | by wildchild | [ Reply to This ]
      This piece spoke to me perhaps because I've been through it recently. And, quite a few times. I like how you used the Flawless Rose, being only Flawless until he stops loving you. But, remember, you're still a rose, and in someone's eyes someday you'll be forever flawless.
    ~BCute
    PS: Quick Tell me to take my own advice...
    | Posted on 2005-01-18 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]


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