Amazing. It is heart-wrenching. I couldn't put myself in anyones place, I felt as though if I did, I might break down. I have lost people very close to my heart, but never a child...I believe losing a child would be the hardest thing. I don't think I would be able to go on, unless there were other children who needed me.
It makes me think of a little thing I read on abortion, although not completely against it, I was torn up afterward. It was from the babies point of view, up until the termination.
I am assuming you do not have any children, and with that assumption I am giving you kudos on writing such a believable poem.
um. i think you're good. it's not just about emotions. i dunno. there's something more of it. maybe the passion. i really dunno. but i think you're really good. you write not just because you want to. haha. [that is so punk rock] ahaha. keep it up.
<i know that the comment guidelines said that our comments shouldn't only be composed of complements...but i think you're really good (: >
A really touchimg poem This write brought tears to my eyes I got the feeling from your last line that you were writing about what would have been a twin brother or sister I may be wrong but I didnt get that feeling until reachimg your last line
This is such a touching piece and it was really sad. My grandmother lost a child but back then it was quite common for children to die(at least in india). But the pain is always still there. I loved the last stanza a lot. It shows u the hopelessness and pain after the death of a dear one. Im not sure i understood the first stanza because it seemed to me that the child was alive so u might want to make that a little clearer but its completely ur call. It really shows how deep a mothers love is(even though that probably wasnt the intended message).This goes on my fav list respecting you gautam
I agree with Bon and I don't want you to get mad at me, but I like your other stuff better. This is sad and really touching and you know how I feel about things with litte children being hurt in anyway. But if I were to be bius to my feelings this is great! I'll pick you up in the morning. Oh and don't forget to do English homework!