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I love the way you laugh

Author: MyKemicalfailur
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I know it's nothing great. But tell me how I can make it better. Every time one of my friends laughs it just makes me smile and this just came out. :)

I love the way you laugh

The way you laugh
Brings a smile to my heart
I told you I loved it from the start

When I hear your laugh
And look in your eyes
I can’t help but smile
And the sadness inside me dies

I love the way you laugh
It’s the only thing that breaks through
The only thing to make the pain go away
The one of the things I love about you

When I’m falling in the darkness
Your laugh is the one thing that saves me
It helps me to see the light
The light I search for every night

Submitted on 2005-01-18 20:18:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is great, this poem made me smile :)
It is so true how a laugh or a smile from a close friend can raise your spirits. Keep this stuff up!

With love,
| Posted on 2006-07-13 00:00:00 | by Jacob Seibert | [ Reply to This ]
  this is the best one of yours i have read so far...

i think it's better than you realise, you have been too hard on yourself with this one. i really can't think of any way to improve it, it's perfect as is.

wait a minute...if you wanted to be really pedantic you could make sure the white space between the stanza's was even. there you go. you can't get more fussy than that :o)

well done.
| Posted on 2005-12-24 00:00:00 | by Senna27NZ | [ Reply to This ]
  Often a smile or a lugh can lift your spirits. Especially if you are hearing it from some one that you truly admire. It's funny how sometimes the littlest thing can bring you out from the sadness and once again shine some joy.

Li Li
| Posted on 2005-05-19 00:00:00 | by ThaCrib | [ Reply to This ]
  i really like this alot!
i know that alot of poeple feel this way.
i know some people who can smile and i just HAVE to smile too ;)
its a great thing and you have brought out its beauty.
Your form and wording is very nice along with your rhyming.

"When I hear your laugh
And look in your eyes
I can’t help but smile
And the sadness inside me dies"

i love this part. how people can make you feel so much better just by smiling .
it all flowed really well together-
Great job!
| Posted on 2005-06-14 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, I know exactly how you feel. We have a few friends...and every time I'm not feeling that good or just feeling down and we go over there...I'm pretty well instantly snapped out of my mood. They just always seem so cheerful and they're always joking and laughing. Laughing is freakin awesome! You did a great job on this!

| Posted on 2006-07-13 00:00:00 | by Raindrops | [ Reply to This ]

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