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    dots Submission Name: Heavy Silent Noisedots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 33
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsHeavy Silent Noisedots

    I want to feel your heavy, silent noise.
    I want to hold the everything void that is you.
    I want to become your dream, your angel
    and turn the loveless into a lover.

    Submitted on 2004-03-26 06:51:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really liked Heavy Silent Noise it rumbled erroticism deep from my soul. Short, sweet and sexy ... yes, I really liked this one. --Jeff
    | Posted on 2004-03-26 00:00:00 | by oixi | [ Reply to This ]
      beautiful. Deafening, but beautiful. Only one line that jars me...
    "I want to hold the everything void that is you"

    I'm not sure that "everything" makes sense there...
    Otherwise, another 4-line gem. Well done! <><
    | Posted on 2004-03-26 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      When I look at your red Shirt, I've thought these very words for days and days, You must have gotten them through telepaphy-- WOW-weee A great little message here
    | Posted on 2004-03-26 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this cuds. you can't squeeze blood from an onion though. the insensitive and loveless is a breed that is hard to teach or remember the humanities of life.
    | Posted on 2004-03-26 00:00:00 | by pestiferous | [ Reply to This ]
      this is greaat! you do a wonderful job with such a short piece. nothing to nit that i can find.

    and you're pretty cute too. :)
    | Posted on 2004-03-26 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]

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