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    dots Submission Name: Your Own Realitydots

    Author: Forgiven
    ASL Info:    38/F/Florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 337/334/97
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       I get so angry when people say things to get right at you.But you have to think they are so unhappy and then understand why they act like they do.This was the first of any that I didnt have rhyme,so let me know what you think.

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    dotsYour Own Realitydots

    To understand the reality of life
    go outside and live.
    Don't hold your anger by your side
    and call on others
    to make yourself happy.

    Your life seems so plain
    and you seem so angry.
    I let you go in peace
    or pieces.....
    you make the decision.

    Dont bring your destruction to me.
    And rampage at my door.
    I have no time for the game
    nor the difficulty in playing it.

    You have said what you ment
    then left it to get rotten.
    I saw this and disregaurded,
    I know what is meaningful.

    This will not continue to bother me
    or follow me around.
    This will be the last of this thought,
    your words,
    your reality.

    Submitted on 2005-01-19 14:25:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is a really powerful piece. it reminds me of a quote i saw once; "don't wait on someone or something to make your life meaningful....YOU have the power of your own happiness". this piece relays this message really well.
    | Posted on 2011-12-18 00:00:00 | by gwenn sundala | [ Reply to This ]
      I have felt like this several times. This poem has alot of meaning to me, I can feel exactly where you are coming from. I like the way it ended, and how the whole thing fit nicely together. thanks for the amazing write

    | Posted on 2006-05-10 00:00:00 | by JetPilot | [ Reply to This ]
      It's sad how people who are miserable seem to have this need to drag others down with them. This is a true statement I think other should think of when they have a good moment brought down by someone who is unhappy with her or his self. This is a good write that speaks directly to the reader. Nicely done :)
    | Posted on 2006-05-09 00:00:00 | by RumnMoxie | [ Reply to This ]
      excellent. u know exactly what i'm saying. this is truly an exceptional write. it's perfect how deep the emotions r, my favorite part is "This will not continue to bother me or follow me around. This will be the last of this thought, your words, your reality." Oh ya baby.
    | Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]
      reminds me of my friends , it seemed simple,, but was so strong
    have to say like everbody else
    dont bring your destruction to me
    and rampage at my door
    was my favotire part
    | Posted on 2006-02-15 00:00:00 | by UnHoLyPoPe | [ Reply to This ]
      It seems to me that you are a very philisophical and caring person and this poem reflects that grandly. Keep it up. I look forward to reading more from you and hope that you will look at my pieces and take th same philisophical view of them.

    | Posted on 2006-02-04 00:00:00 | by sageeriol | [ Reply to This ]
      it seems that this is your featured work for good reason. this one is very readable, very visible in my mind, and very strong for my emotions. my favorite lines are the last three: this will be the last of this thought / your words / your reality

    that's awesome.
    | Posted on 2005-09-21 00:00:00 | by keithypoo | [ Reply to This ]
      Well said, we shouldn't share anger it's something we all do, because we are human. ..not everything is easy for us.
    No one can make us happy other than ourselves, it's just a fact of life. I've been reading Aristotle and his bent on happiness is "doing exactly as were designed to do, gives us the broadest sense of happiness", I have to agree. If someone can support us doing that which is us, I think I would call it love.
    Thanks Denise for sharing this one, great job!!
    peace and love,
    | Posted on 2005-09-04 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      "Dont bring your destruction to me.
    And rampage at my door.
    I have no time for the game
    nor the difficulty in playing it.''

    this spoke out to me the most as i have had many people try to flex their mental instabilities on me for whatever reason they deem to be fit. i am small in stature so i seem to be an easy target but like you i have no time for these types of childish squirmishes, bla bla bla!
    this was a cool piece, i am no scholar in the art so i have no critique...exept to say...don't stop writing! thanks for ready my poem!

    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by orpheus | [ Reply to This ]
      "your reality" - that line summons contemplation, emotion and forces the reader to confront their own situation. "your reality" is shaped by factors and reading this makes me think my reality will never be thought about the same way again.
    | Posted on 2005-05-05 00:00:00 | by Tekin_Kashami | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a totally well written piece. This was great on many levels, first that you stood up for yourself in real life which is far more important than any poem could ever be,bravo

    secondly your expressed your feelings with grace, intelligents and with vigor from the heart to the pen to the paper,bravo

    I love it enough to add it to my fav
    | Posted on 2005-02-16 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      like the first person to comment.. this was simple but strong.. i makes me think of things that have happened between us.. so basically i read it twice.. and found that this is my fav part:
    Dont bring your destruction to me.
    And rampage at my door.
    good write.
    | Posted on 2005-01-19 00:00:00 | by darkwisdom623 | [ Reply to This ]
      very good. not lotting thigs get you down and being able to over look. my favorit line in this piece is, "I let you go in peace
    or pieces..." the imagry you used was wonderful. rythem in poetry is very hard. i am prable one of the worst at it. the piece did however flow well.
    | Posted on 2005-02-23 00:00:00 | by snufthepunk28 | [ Reply to This ]

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