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Submission Name: she shells, sea sells dots

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Author:	wilderness
ASL Info:	23/M/Surrey, UK
Elite Ratio:	3.19 - 252/359/86
Words:	180

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	388
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	1446

Description:
so f.ucking tired

she shells, sea sells dots

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we're transcending, blocking
something's rocking
but nothing is shocking
just..

pale cold translucant turtle
no point hiding in your shell
i can see right through

but
i can't touch you

and i guess that's the point
you're trying to make

something's rocking
but nothing is shocking
the electric left here

left her
colder
older
emotional boulder

lead weight
dead shape
sinking and misplaced

don't think of me
i don't think of you
i don't think
as often as i should

i'm still so tired
have i been sleeping all this time?

i'm still so scared
of waking
with you not mine

and i'm still so blue
always and forever true

and i'm still so fond

of the ocean
the way that it always waves to you

so
let's skip a few stones home
into the sunset
this scenery's backlit
perfectly photographic

and salty
forever salty
undrinkable volume
unthinkable volume

will
someone please

turn it

down

Submitted on 2005-01-19 20:14:32 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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||| Comments |||
  i love the word play in this, the colors that come from it. it feels like it ripped itself out of you. and the ocean, waving and blue, that always gets to me and then you go with the volume:P out-wordplaying me!
| Posted on 2005-01-20 00:00:00 | by joe quinn | [ Reply to This ]
  Salty, I think is one of the most descriptive and image provoking words. I liked reading this one. I read it out loud. It's got a good combination of flow and simply beautiful lines. I guess I really picked up on a few points, because I love the ocean, and I love your reference to it.
| Posted on 2005-01-19 00:00:00 | by reid kat | [ Reply to This ]
  this was like a story. i was sucked in immediately! i think this has a little bit of a Poe feel with the flow.
the title plays on the cute little imagery of nursery rhymes, but the content is far from elementary.

of the ocean
the way that it always waves to you

beautiful!

-nikki
| Posted on 2005-03-01 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]

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