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    dots Submission Name: Give it Up!dots
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    Author: River
    ASL Info:    17/F/New York
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 26/37/14
    Words: 261
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsGive it Up!dots
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    I got a drug dealer on the corner not caring who he offends, just as long as he makes his own ends. He claims he’s not a murderer but a cat who’s making his living. But, you living kills the life of people who are living. So what are you doing selling or killing.

    Give it up! I cry so loud he drops what he’s doing. Give it up! Do something else get persuing. But, he ignores what i say, and goes about destroying more lives in more than one way.

    Or the crack fiend thats pregnant and buys for him all the time. Giving into temptation not caring how it destroys her mind. Selling everything she can to feed the intoleration. She’s not killing only herself but another generation.

    Give it up! I cry so loud she drops the crack vile. Give it up! Don’t you see what your doing to yourself and your child! But, she ignores what I say and goes about destroying more lives in more than one way.

    Or the child that she bears who has discovered what it is like to be teased because he has deformities. Which was not his fault but his mothers responsibility. And everyday he comes home and cries. Until one day he decides to commit suicide.

    Give it up! I cry so loud he gets loose. Give it up! Don’t you want to live? But, he ignores what i say and puts on the noose. Destroying more lives in more than one way.





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      I like this poem and your poem shows the truth in so many ways. I think that I will write a poem though on the other point of view, the desperation of having drugs as the only means to get by, having to deal to make money for food, not that I agree with this but I think both points should be made.Very good poem.
    | Posted on 2005-01-20 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      man... what can I say? wow... this is amazing, it touches on so many things... how did you write this? Your poetic ability is far beyond comrehension for me
    | Posted on 2005-01-20 00:00:00 | by rapius | [ Reply to This ]
      Do you really approach these dealers and ussers? I'm sure it's not easy to kick the glass dick and i'm sure that such a confrontational approach to helping some one is wrong, but your very brave for doing so, if only in your poetry.
    | Posted on 2005-01-20 00:00:00 | by vvv | [ Reply to This ]



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