oh my god- xtremegentleman isn't very suave, is he? he said something in reference to Just One Night on one of mine... and how maybe we'd do it in real life one day... i was like 'hopeful much?' anyhow- great poem, rework the last line, change 'how to do with' to 'how to deal with' and this will be great... it strays from the typicality of the subject, and i like that. *md*
I'm really glad you found your cure. NO one should do this it is a horrible thing to do. I think it is great that you didn't give up hope on yourself. I think that is a good cure. Look at the good things you have in life. DOn't give them up. You are strong that you gave this up. I think it was a good write. It overall was good.
in all honesty this line is kind of weird 'Not knowing how to do with the pain' but the poem itself wasn't that bad, it's just too over done- but i'll admit that i've over done it a few times too. congrats on finding your cure.
I have read allot of poems about self-destruction and they all usually give off the same feeling the feeling of hope gone stale and sorrow and loliness they usualy have the draining darkness but yours i see you havent copleatly given up hope and i see light and i thinks because of that your finding your cure and for that i tip my hat to you i see many people going down an endless tunnel but i see light at the end of yours meaning i know your going to compleatly pull out of this i can tell you have a srong soul and in these times that is truly a gift to cherish and because of that you give hope to others that are going through the same thing so congratulations on the poem it was a liitle short but i found it a great read i cant wait to see more of your poems good luck
I am the cure! I'm what you need girl. I'll change your whole life in the heat of Just One Night. lol I'm just kidding boo. This is a straight piece. I personally am not a fan of this type but I like what you did with it. You provided emotion and imagery such as crimson drops. Hopefully, this isn't true but if it is I am sorry. In other words, good write and of course...Keep doing what ya doing.