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    dots Submission Name: I Need A Curedots
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    Author: grinninggashes
    ASL Info:    17/f/from sumwhere :)
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 154/124/25
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
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       Im not very bad with doing this anymore... so I guess you can say I've found my cure...and I hope others find theres too :)


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    Putting the sharp object on my skin
    I force down
    untill it sneaks on in

    Crimson drops bubble out
    a certain pain is let go
    and only I know what its about

    Not knowing how to do with the pain
    theres one friend that I have
    and it keeps me sane

    Many people look down with shame
    I would give an excuse
    but some would say its to lame

    Eventually I'll over come this sickness
    and once I find my cure
    I know I'll be a bliss




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      oh my god- xtremegentleman isn't very suave, is he? he said something in reference to Just One Night on one of mine... and how maybe we'd do it in real life one day... i was like 'hopeful much?' anyhow- great poem, rework the last line, change 'how to do with' to 'how to deal with' and this will be great... it strays from the typicality of the subject, and i like that. *md*
    | Posted on 2005-03-13 00:00:00 | by MerryDeath | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm really glad you found your cure. NO one should do this it is a horrible thing to do. I think it is great that you didn't give up hope on yourself. I think that is a good cure. Look at the good things you have in life. DOn't give them up. You are strong that you gave this up. I think it was a good write. It overall was good.
    | Posted on 2005-01-26 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm glad you posted this I'm hoping that some of the other readers who have this problem or habit will try to find their own cure as well.
    | Posted on 2005-01-21 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      I guess I need to find my cure. This was an inspiration. I'm glad you found yours. You keep a hold of it and don't ever let go. Promise? K.
    ~BCute
    | Posted on 2005-01-20 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      All I can say is good for you for finding your cure! I can't say i relate...but definitely a good piece of writing...and i'm happy that you could write it! Good job!
    | Posted on 2005-01-20 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]
      in all honesty this line is kind of weird
    'Not knowing how to do with the pain'
    but the poem itself wasn't that bad, it's just too over done- but i'll admit that i've over done it a few times too.
    congrats on finding your cure.
    | Posted on 2005-01-20 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]
      I have read allot of poems about self-destruction and they all usually give off the same feeling the feeling of hope gone stale and sorrow and loliness they usualy have the draining darkness but yours i see you havent copleatly given up hope and i see light and i thinks because of that your finding your cure and for that i tip my hat to you i see many people going down an endless tunnel but i see light at the end of yours meaning i know your going to compleatly pull out of this i can tell you have a srong soul and in these times that is truly a gift to cherish and because of that you give hope to others that are going through the same thing so congratulations on the poem it was a liitle short but i found it a great read i cant wait to see more of your poems good luck
    | Posted on 2005-01-20 00:00:00 | by runaway_poet | [ Reply to This ]
      I am the cure! I'm what you need girl. I'll change your whole life in the heat of Just One Night. lol I'm just kidding boo. This is a straight piece. I personally am not a fan of this type but I like what you did with it. You provided emotion and imagery such as crimson drops. Hopefully, this isn't true but if it is I am sorry. In other words, good write and of course...Keep doing what ya doing.
    | Posted on 2005-02-02 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]


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