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    dots Submission Name: Death of a Teddybeardots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 804
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    Description:
       The teddy bear represents an ex relationship and the bowtie is a wound, the death of the bear(which came from my ex) and the death of the relationship itself.


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    dotsDeath of a Teddybeardots
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    lying on the floor
    my teddybear
    something I never saw
    or did I ever care
    red and wrapped around his kneck
    it must be suffocating
    I must have missed this
    it's intoxicating
    lying on the floor
    in ribbon and crimson red
    is this a bow tie ?
    or is this teddy dead ?




    Submitted on 2005-01-20 12:09:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      That's a pretty deep poem. Interesting metaphor - using a teddy bear to express pain and misery. You have the true essence of a poet.
    | Posted on 2005-01-27 00:00:00 | by Lulu La Feyne | [ Reply to This ]
      Honestly, I LOVE this... the usual facad of teddy bears being the proper and prim bowtie suckers. Personally i think some should die... in all truth, Ive been attacked by bears before... burn em all! all the while i was licking the utters~!
    | Posted on 2005-01-21 00:00:00 | by BuryThisLie | [ Reply to This ]


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