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    dots Submission Name: The Peakdots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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       This incase you can't tell is about the peak of hitting the pill, or in my case the peak of insanity, maybe the pill is my insanity? I don't know.

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    dotsThe Peakdots

    I sit here waiting,this moment will never come
    I sit here hating,dying to be numb
    I sit in my arms,rocking my pain
    I need to disappear,I need to escape

    I sit here watching, for red to fill my eyes
    I sit here dying,for this moment to pass me by
    and then it hits me,I have reached the peak
    head suddenly dizzy, body suddenly weak
    it makes me happy, I cast a little smile
    I live inside my head, and breathe for a little while

    Submitted on 2005-01-20 12:29:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. You really said a lot in just a few words. I don't usually like reading depressing peotry, but I can really relate to yours. I can see how it's either the peak of 'the pill' or insanity, and the confusion between them. once again WOW.
    | Posted on 2005-01-20 00:00:00 | by elitegundam | [ Reply to This ]
      ok, the thing is the poem, too me, just too simple depicted the pain. it was plain and simple depiction which indiacted the pain and not the insanity. i think if it could in some how give a hint of insanity, it would be a great write. i enjoyed the last stanza.
    | Posted on 2005-01-20 00:00:00 | by shahan | [ Reply to This ]

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