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    dots Submission Name: My Prayerdots
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    Author: EL
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 272/189/52
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Misc/Longing
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    One year he says,
    That's it no more.
    I tell him as my eyes cry,
    My heart breaks that,
    " That one year will seem like an eternity.
    One year of worry,
    One year of grief,
    One year of loneliness,
    One year of fear.
    How can you say it's only one year?"
    That's when tries to reasure,
    " I'll be ok. I can come home for One week if God willing."
    That's when I begin to pray,
    "Oh lord please keep him safe,
    Wrap your strong, warm gentle arms around him,
    Protect him from the enemy's wrath,
    Let him know he is loved and never alone,
    Let him know I will always be here.
    Oh lord I beg please just bring home,
    alive an well."
    That was that we had to say our last good byes and I love yous.





    Submitted on 2005-01-20 18:14:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I feel you, I really do. I have a bunch of friends in the same situation. An ex-girlfriend is really angry with a boy because he promised he would never join the military, and now he's in training to go over to Iraq. I want him to go and get killed personally, he's a [censored]head and needs to die, teach him to steal my girl... I hope her new boyfriend gets himself killed soon too. [censored]s.

    I hate war, but sometimes it's necessary. I'm pulling for you though, and I hope everything works out for you. A year is a long time to go without seeing somebody, but it can be done.

    Grow strong.
    | Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by Zabriel | [ Reply to This ]
      hi
    this is a very good poem
    im assuming your writing about someone who went off to war possibly Iraq
    know that hes in our hearts i also wish him a safe return
    know as an american citizen i am extremely proud of those who fight for our country
    there kind unselfish deed will not go unrewarded

    he will be fine im sure
    i too will pray for him

    Take Care
    oh since this was written a while ago how is he please let me know
    | Posted on 2005-10-08 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      wow! i love the flow... and sense of longing! it works for me;) i love the way you talk to God and express your longing to him. it made me emotional:)
    Wrap your strong, warm gentle arms around him,
    Protect him from the enemy's wrath,
    Let him know he is loved and never alone,
    Let him know I will always be here.
    Oh lord I beg please just bring home,
    alive an well."

    i love it
    | Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by michaela | [ Reply to This ]
       this is so sad..sad yet the poem is beautiful. it is hard to be away from someone you love when so much could happen...but just keep praying.
    | Posted on 2005-01-20 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]


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