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Green Eyes


Author: painofthanatos
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Words: 60
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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OLD and short...


Green Eyes


Catch me as I slip into a world of green.
Such a dark and marvelous green.
Oh what beautiful eyes you have.
They tell such a story...

A story of a life.
Of a love.
Of Our Love.
Oh this is a story I never get tired of hearing.
Tell me once more as I slip into green eyes...




Submitted on 2005-01-20 18:21:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i loved the first stanza :) it made me feel as though id been dropped into a glittery jungle...moohaha :D. the second however seemed a little plain for you. i think you could spice that up a bit :)
sophie
| Posted on 2005-04-15 00:00:00 | by sudie | [ Reply to This ]
  hey this was pretty good courtney.. it was short and simple and sweet.. I like how everything revolved around green.. what an awesome color to choose... question, why the color green is that the color of that stoner guys eyes... either way this was an awesome piece and I really enjoyed it... great work ethic...
| Posted on 2005-01-21 00:00:00 | by bleedbroken | [ Reply to This ]
  This is sweet. It's great to know you can look into someone's eyes and know what they most desire and everything else. This put a smile on my face; I really needed that today, thanks. Beautiful write. Keep it up.

Rain
| Posted on 2005-01-20 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey there. I have to say that eyes are my favorite facial feature besides a smile. There's so much that you can tell about a person by looking into their eyes. The eyes truly are the window to the soul.

This piece is well written. Beautiful work my dear. Much love to ya.
| Posted on 2005-01-20 00:00:00 | by Juliets_dagger | [ Reply to This ]


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