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Size Three Sweater


Author: MyKemicalfailur
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too many girls have it in their head that they NEED to be skinny...real women have curves!! :) I've got one question. If I have a picture to go with this...how do I put it up with the poem??


Size Three Sweater



She tried again and again
Just to be a size ten
Every time she stepped on the scale
She felt like a whale
So she decided not to eat
Just one week
She’d lose a few pounds
And everything wouldn’t be so round
But one week just wouldn’t do
Soon that week turned into two
After a few weeks
She still wouldn’t eat
She got to the size ten
But she thought it over again
A size 8 sounds thin
Maybe she could show some skin
Her face turned pale
She became quite frail
Her pants were saggy
And her shirts too baggy
People started to say she looked nice
So she thought maybe she could eat…just some rice
But she couldn’t keep it down
That rice would make her round
But she longed for something to eat
Maybe some nice juicy meat
The thought was too much to bear
So after she ate it she pulled back her hair
Flushing it all away
She decided to do this every day
She thought this was much better
Soon she could fit into that size 3 sweater
But soon never came around
Because 2 weeks later she was six feet under the ground




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  This is a great piece. It should be posted in Magazines or the newspaper or read on tv. I kid you not it's good. I loved the easy pace nice and smooth. Also it gave great imagery. You not only saw into the person's view but you also felt the persons perspective on this. Bottom line I think this poem gives valadation for those inflicted with the disease of starving them selfes. You know people are people no matter where you go there you are. By the same token everyone has an oponion. Also you cannot save the world. There also is, No matter what you do not everyone is going to like you. Ta da
Greed in any form is greed. One should not only be kind to others but to them selfes as well.


Sincerely Gannondalf aka Big Bear
| Posted on 2006-07-27 00:00:00 | by Gannondalf | [ Reply to This ]
  No person should do this to there self but I understand why they do. Movie stars, modles, tv and magazines. Rubin would of threw up if he would of seen all the skinny women in the world today!
Its not as bad as it was in the 80's but its still out there.
Thanks for the great poem maybe everyone will think about this real hard?
Kelley Frost
| Posted on 2006-07-26 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
  very nice
I think that you wrote well about somehting that plagues america and more specifically high schools. thank you
you should send it in to your local paper as an editorial
| Posted on 2006-03-20 00:00:00 | by Morticus | [ Reply to This ]
  Interesting, im not personally a big fan of rhyming but it had a great moral, and got the point across, good job..

-Anya
| Posted on 2006-07-11 00:00:00 | by FarawayFeelings | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow! i luv this poem when i read it it makes me cry b/c i suffered from an eating disorder for about years.And noone even noticed until everything went to far.I never got hospitalized for it but it was very hard to deal with it.But ne wayz i love this even tho im still suffering with this ed.Im gonna add it to my favs cuz its so great.But goood job!
| Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by suicidal_chick | [ Reply to This ]
  wow you did an awsome job this poem rocks, you are very good with being discriptive and yet veige, not much to add, ...Party on!
| Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by catie jo | [ Reply to This ]
  wow...this is a good write...iknew alot of girls when i was in high school...that were anorexic bulemic...society puts these thought in their heads its horrible...high school...in general does...teens can be evil...but its sad that it comes to things like this...a girl died from anorexia when i was in school...and she was sickly thin and her parents were surprised never new she had a problem...i guess you can hide anything...its just weird i didnt even know her and iknew something was wrong...her parents lived with her and they didnt know...denial?...who knows...i'm going of the subject...this is a great subject...well not rreally you know what i mean...its something people need to hear...and your right we don't need to be size three tobe beautiful...i've seen woman who are size sixteen that are beautiful...but i guess some people are shallow and have to make some people feellike they need to be sickly thin...its horrible...but truthful...purps
| Posted on 2005-01-25 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
  This was well written and i know how she felt. I suffered on and off from eating disorders for years as well as many of my friends. the ten pounds you lose is never enough and you can believe that you are fat no matter how much you lose. its a really scary battle that too many people face
| Posted on 2005-01-25 00:00:00 | by Ann | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow!
I like this alot! some people get such a distorted view of themselves and, mess up their
health to be what they think they need to be...

I'm adding it to my favs!
TeddyD
| Posted on 2005-01-20 00:00:00 | by TeddyD | [ Reply to This ]


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