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    dots Submission Name: Timedots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 24
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsTimedots
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    Time makes memories fade
    until the past is
    as murky and stagnant
    as a polluted pond
    covered in algae.






    Submitted on 2004-03-26 10:27:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nice imagery! now that i try and remember, i find that the past is indeed all mixed up... and in a way so is the future - because the future is going to be the past someday - hmm... this needs some thinking through
    | Posted on 2004-03-26 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      this is my fvorite way of saying things, little words, big emotion and/or message, good job.
    | Posted on 2004-03-26 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice piece... Wonderful metaphor. angela took all the things I wanted to say! Well done, cuds! <><
    | Posted on 2004-03-26 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      This is what I think... I think the image of a murky,stagnant pond expresses the exact feeling you were going for. What I get from this is that there are some memories in the past that hurt and are better left unremembered. The stagnant and polluted pond gets across the message that even though the memories may be repressed, they have somehow tainted you anyway.
    I think you said a lot with a few words. No matter what the others opinions may be regarding this piece, I think it powerfully reflected the detrimental effects of some memories.
    | Posted on 2004-03-26 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      NIce metaphor! Love it, its so true, I so no what you are saying, even though it only takes a 24 hours and I forgot what I did yesterday, LOL! Good thought!
    | Posted on 2004-03-26 00:00:00 | by ViCiOuSWrItEr | [ Reply to This ]


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