Virginity by River

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Submission Name: Virginity dots

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Author:	River
ASL Info:	17/F/New York
Elite Ratio:	2.84 - 26/37/14
Words:	130

Class/Type:	Poetry/You left me
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Virginity dots

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"Virginity"

He tells me that he can give me all I need.

If i give him what he wants, my desires he'll feed.

Whispering lies in my ear he steals away my heart.

It's like now that he has it, I can't stand it when were apart.

Now I listen for his footsteps when were supposed to meet.

I'm scared of what news he has when he says "take a seat".

Imagine love as fast as a roller coaster, but I'm in the front seat.

You told me you'd leave me if I didn't give unto thee.

I needed you, so I gave you the one thing valued the most. My Virginity.

And then you still left me.

Submitted on 2005-01-20 21:56:44 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Guys can be jerks when it comes to that, and it's hard tell when they're being honest and they actually have feelings for you and when they're just feeding you lines.
This is good. It has true emotions, which is wonderful.
Great job.

Rain
| Posted on 2005-02-04 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]
  Thanx for your comments on poetry i am glad you enjoyed eveytime i get a comment from a new writer i reply. i liked your poem you wrote never been my expierence with females to decieve them like that based on my expierence there is someone for everyone so dont let it get you down if it did great piece and i see you got lots of comments
thanx again
Sandman
| Posted on 2005-02-01 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
  Man I know I have a few friends that can relate to that one. But I really don't give into many boys BS and thats why I still value what I have
D.Johnson
put your V cards in the air
| Posted on 2005-01-23 00:00:00 | by D.Johnson p.s.a | [ Reply to This ]
  wow. this has happened to a lot of girls that I know. that is why I plan to wait. nehwo. this is a wonderful poem. and it's something that tons of teens deal with...so many people will be touched by this...great job.
| Posted on 2005-01-22 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]
  Yeah good job ...You will touch alot of people with this i think ...I agree with BCute ...Sex isnt a big deal anymore to most...Even alot of girls...Its sad...but i thought you put your feelings across well and the structure made it flow nicely
| Posted on 2005-01-21 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
  Stupid boys. Idiotic boys. *Sighs* I'm sorry this happened, really. Virginity and Sex just isn't something sacred anymore. It's not love..ist just sex anymore. And, someone always gets hurt thinking its love both ways, when its really just sex one way and only one person feeling the love.
~BCute
| Posted on 2005-01-21 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this. I think it's a true-to-life honest depiction of something that happens to much in our society among teenagers. I too gave my virginity to someone who was never really there for me and in the end I had to force myself to leave him. Instead of dwelling on what was lost however, I've found comfort in moving on knowing that I've learned enough from this experience it's almost worth its cost. Good luck and keep up the great writing.
| Posted on 2005-01-20 00:00:00 | by kissingadict | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey, it was a good topic. It's a common teenage girl problem. They all give it away too quickly, just because "They love them so..."
If only they knew what was really going on...
Good write.
Jaymi
| Posted on 2005-01-20 00:00:00 | by theDevilsPocket | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh wow. Such a regular teenaged thing to deal with, but you put it so well, the words were so profound, as though he stole something, persuading you to give it to him, and then running away with it. Its so horrible because so many girls have to deal with that, they dedicate everything to that one guy, who doesnt even care.
Anyways, good write and good luck!
-Andrya
| Posted on 2005-01-20 00:00:00 | by andrya | [ Reply to This ]

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