I quite like it actually...And i dont think that you have hidden anything in it ...I think that you say exactly what you think this world is ...Its got a really nice and natural flow to it too ...the way you have set it out just makes the words hit home a little more...I thought it was great ...Good Job
interesting, I don't think that its exactly perfectly clear what your implying that this world is, but maybe thats the point, it opens up a most interesting field of speculation that I have maybe not so naturally have not previously got into very deeply. Good job though, sometimes feelings just burble out, and the end prodect is either good or a crap load of rambles, but this was pretty good, maybe jsut a bit more clarifaction on what you are saying what the world is. either then that...good good..