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    dots Submission Name: In The Enddots
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    Author: kickthekitty
    ASL Info:    15/f/VT
    Elite Ratio:    2.33 - 16/18/5
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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    dotsIn The Enddots
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    I hope you don't think everything's okay
    Because you never seem to give me the time of day
    I really hope you understand
    You make me feel like I'm in quicksand
    If i make a wtrong move I will sink and die
    But if I stay still you'll never say hi

    I want you now
    But I don't know how
    I'm not the same
    and I know you've changed

    I know sometimes you get mad at me
    Even if you can't admit it
    But I'm just trying to be the best Ican be
    Even if you don't believe me one bit

    I'm sorry, I'm sorry
    I'll say it again
    Don't worry, Don't worry
    I'm sure in the end
    We'll still be friends





    Submitted on 2005-01-21 07:18:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow very nice poem i loved the rhyming and evrything i also liked the lines I'm sorry, I'm sorry
    I'll say it again
    Don't worry, Don't worry
    I'm sure in the end
    We'll still be friends
    any way good luck with life and the person that you wrote that for
    | Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by yuber1990 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow very good
    i love it! it had a awesome flow to it very nice
    i have also been through this before weird stuff
    well good job
    ~ununderstood
    | Posted on 2005-01-21 00:00:00 | by UNunderStood | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this poem cause the lyrics ryme great in the poem so i say good job to you. but you made one mistake the word strong is spelt wrong you spelt it wtrong.
    | Posted on 2005-01-21 00:00:00 | by Draco | [ Reply to This ]


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