Elegant no-more
What she'd deserved to be
Naked no-more
Opened her eyes to me
Thoughts no-more
What she believed to see
myself no-more
Lusts the lock, hates the key
Regrets maybe
she made me feel so-small
Tired maybe
can't believe i loved at all
scared maybe
that hate'll make me fall
love maybe
no no no not at all
The rhyming was really good, I also liked the whole layout of this poem. I don't find it too depressing at all, in fact, I like depressing poems, as weird as this is going to sound, they actually make me feel better! lol. Yeah, i know. Well, anyway, good job.
I liked it, good use of rhyming. Overall I found it a bit too depressing, but I can take any poem as depressing atm. Really good descriptions and use of words
I love how you paint her with your words, awesome subject. I think that I am becoming a bit of a fan of yours, I look forward to much more of your work.
Submission Name: Maybe No-more
