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    dots Submission Name: final calldots

    Author: UNunderStood
    ASL Info:    16/f/oh
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 79/87/25
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
    Total Views: 768
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       humm... i dont really know like before
    "this person"was going to kill herself she called her boyfriend and if he answeared then she wont if he didnt then she will..kill herself
    well please comment for me

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    dotsfinal calldots

    the final call
    Is the call for help
    this call I make to you
    for only you can save me
    when I dail your number I get a rush
    with in my heart
    ...no one is answearing,
    I really need you right now
    you have failed me
    Now i must leave
    for there is nothing left to live for
    for every slit of the knife
    I think of your face the memories I had
    with you
    i have gone to far to go back you can not save
    for what i have destored within my soul
    but yet wait..
    the phone is ringing
    i See your name on the caller I.D
    what should i do?
    should i answear to hear your voice one last time to hear the words"no i love you"
    or to go on with it
    it will all be over soon
    I'm starting to fade with blood running
    down my finger tips
    im scared!
    Im not going to pick it up,
    For that was the final call for help that was never answaerd

    Submitted on 2005-01-21 12:03:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i liked it.. it was a nice piece.. well i havent ever been there and i am not a sait.. or well i dont think so anyway... but ohh well .. i liked it but it is kind of more of a short story in a way.. but ohh well dont mean to offend... sorry if i did
    and i hope everything gets better for you if its you .that you are talking about in the poem
    | Posted on 2005-02-16 00:00:00 | by Caroline_19 | [ Reply to This ]
      It's all a bit modern day Romeo and juliet isn't it? I liked it alot and I think that it was an wonderful piece, I have been there, what girl hasn't unless you are a saint? and I think that you did really well with it.
    | Posted on 2005-01-21 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]

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