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    dots Submission Name: unwanteddots
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    Author: UNunderStood
    ASL Info:    16/f/oh
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 79/87/25
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    you have became unwanted,
    when you look in the mirror
    not really sure why you're here
    you make yourself invisable in a crowd
    you keep putting yourself down
    you do not eat for the depression
    makes you sick
    for you was the one who made you like this
    you need help
    you have to much self dout,
    for yet it can not be exsplained
    why she puts herself through so much pain




    Submitted on 2005-01-21 12:08:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey i wanted to write back and say thanks for your commet, but frist i want to read one of your poems so i could return thr favor...This poem is super good...I have felt like that one to many times...You really captured the feeling in this write...good work my firend...Rock On!
    | Posted on 2005-02-17 00:00:00 | by ForJordan03 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this one. I can really see where you are coming from. I hope that you can get your feelings out through your poetry. And that you eventually feel better. :)
    | Posted on 2005-01-22 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]
      This is something that I am going through right now, you described every step of pain so well and for this I simply love it. Very good piece.
    | Posted on 2005-01-21 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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