I liked this, especially the end. I thought it added a nice bit of levity to the piece. I'm not much of a winter person either, and I hate letting go of a time in my life that brought me hope, as I recently had to do. Keep up the good work, HWKI
It seems to me that September, in this case, is either metaphorical, or symbolic of the timing of this relationship. Was it the last month you were with this person? Or is it that because you don't like "winter" (symbolic for being alone?), "September" is what you consider the relationship/ girl? Is "September" the last time you felt like she was there?
Anyway, I thought the piece was good. I didn't really see anything that I could say needed work. I think it is well worded, and well written. It is a piece that allows the reader to think, get his/her own meaning from what is there, and also from what isn't . Good job.
r u complaining about the weather or the loss of someone? i wasn't real sure on that. i think these stanzas are great though, i really like them. perhaps you could explore them more? i don't know just a thought i had. well anyway this is good and as soon as i know what you are meaning in it the better i can understand it in whole****