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    dots Submission Name: Left behinddots
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    Author: steph1011
    Elite Ratio:    2.42 - 34/45/25
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
    Total Views: 343
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 613



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       Have a big thing with my coach. Please comment. Or any advise.


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    dotsLeft behinddots
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    Their is no bother
    show up.
    Nothing in it for me
    just to sit there and do nothing.
    Watch but no action.
    Tears fall from my face.
    Everything is a blurr
    I don't realize why
    she hates me so much.
    I mean what did I do wrong.
    I mustive did something
    pretty bad.
    But I can't figure it out
    sometimes I feel so left
    out. But you don't reckonize it
    because you already picked your
    favorites.
    I want to ask why
    What did I do
    but everytime I try to
    you walk away.




    Submitted on 2005-01-21 18:56:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      What a basic poem. You should make it more intense, I would about this situation. This was a good write otherwise.
    Good work
    stephanie
    | Posted on 2005-01-22 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a basic poem.
    I suggest changing the lines around, like if there's one word left don't change lines, It looks funny.

    Karios
    "Help! My bangs are on fire!"
    | Posted on 2005-01-21 00:00:00 | by Karios | [ Reply to This ]



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