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    dots Submission Name: Beacon of Hopedots
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    Author: BuryThisLie
    ASL Info:    18/Male/Virginia...
    Elite Ratio:    4.77 - 17/22/5
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/I hate you
    Total Views: 918
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       Wow... goodness knows i was in a tiff when i wrote this. To be honest... im REALLY tweaked... listenin to tunes got me thinking about some stupid wench... and i wrote this to her. Now in most cases just knowing I had written true spite in someones direction... would be good... but no... she gets a copy too. Anyways wreck it or trash it... i dont care.


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    dotsBeacon of Hopedots
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    You never did like me
    and i can understand...
    but i want to know: that
    if the group needed me so bad,
    why do you work so hard
    just to keep me out?
    Lonely little girl...
    I hear you cry behind your arrogance,
    or rather fear wrapped in arrogance.
    Fearof what, I dont know.
    Work out your issues
    and then come see me.

    I really want to know
    why i should have stayed...
    your complex has grown
    to trying to convince MY friends
    to lie.
    Make it so i wont do it;
    your troupe should have fun...
    because you're the Queen of Fools
    with not only a crown of mediocraty,
    but the loyal fools
    who bow to your will
    and your misgained throne.
    So enjoy the bright light,
    dear Queen of fools,
    it only leads you and the other sheep
    to slaughter.




    Submitted on 2005-01-21 23:21:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a really good piece of poetry and I am very happy that I found it, I am looking forward to seeing more of your work and thanks for adding my poem Death of a Teddybear to your favorites. Nice to know you liked it.

    Peace,
    lori_tab
    | Posted on 2005-01-24 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Very interesting. Your title misled me. I think it would have been more appropriate if you'd named it something like, "Queen of Fools" or ...i dunno.
    Lonely little girl...
    I hear you cry behind your arrogance,
    or rather fear wrapped in arrogance.
    Sad.
    Suven.
    I like these lines. It reminds me of every human soul there is, and has ever been. (except for jesus). It reminds me of me.
    I liked the envelop around the queen of fools; makes me think of a carnival, wait- a circus. troupe and all.
    | Posted on 2005-01-22 00:00:00 | by Suven7 | [ Reply to This ]


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