You know what I think would be better? If your mind were like a swimming pool with dead spiders, rats and frogs floating around in it. And maybe your pool could be over chlorinated with cynicism. Or your filters clogged with green-slime depression. Or maybe I should just write my own poem like that. Well, I wonder what could clean out a mind like that?
mmmm... interesting. Very clear, VERY cool metaphor. In a way, it would be nice to have a sort of mental filter to keep the brain clean...but can you imagine the sorts of things that might get accidently filtered? Memories that caused a little pain but in the long run brought smiles as well as tears. This is another nice piece from you. Essence of cuddle... one distinct image, complete w/ metaphor, as succinctly put as possible. <><
i liked the analogy, good short write. it reminds of a commercial i've seen about these musicians made of water and one gets some crap in his shoulder and one fishes it out so he can play well again. i think it's some type of communication company putting it out.