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    dots Submission Name: Howdots

    Author: EL
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 272/189/52
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    How can you stand there,
    Trying to look so innocent?
    How can you look me in the eyes,
    Saying all of those lies?
    How dare you you even try to come near,
    When I'm well aware of what you did!
    How can you call yourself a friend,
    You lied, cheated, and belittled me?
    Why couldn't just tell me the truth?
    Why couldn't your love for me be real?
    How could I be so blind?
    No don't look at me now,
    No don't try to tell me now,
    No don't try to get my forgiveness now!
    I'm done, your gone, Kicked out the door!

    Submitted on 2005-01-23 14:03:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it was good, interesting. i wonder, i have you heard of a band called XIU XIU? this reminds me of their stuff, though this is a lot tamer.
    | Posted on 2007-07-01 00:00:00 | by freddybuzzkill | [ Reply to This ]
      Kind of like my wife in the third or forth year, a little rage, throwing things, etc. Not necessarily for anything I did, just that situations add up sometimes, not as expected for that time.

    In my case, there was and is a long and happy ending, so never give up totally if there's any hope. I like the open invite expressed by:

    No don't look at me now,
    No don't try to tell me now,
    No don't try to get my forgiveness now!

    Very good! Sometimes it's necessary to cool down a little, but not for too long. To forgive is divine, but make it while it's still warm.
    Enjoyed it.
    | Posted on 2005-10-06 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      very very good! i like this poem and i can also relate to it very much so. I like the way you have remained so adamant with your reply to the erson who hurt you and kicked them out the door, perhaps metaphorically or in reality. anyway a shockingly great poem little words
    | Posted on 2005-01-25 00:00:00 | by leanne | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good expression, the words were real strong in this poem. There's nothing real big I could say to critique this. I hope everything works out for you in the future. I really like this poem!
    | Posted on 2005-01-23 00:00:00 | by MorbidAngel114 | [ Reply to This ]

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